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Take another drag from your cigarette,
Burn your lungs with the chemistry learned in school.
Watch the ashes fall away,
It's suicide, just to be cool.

But I bet you haven't considered,
That when you've grown old and ill,
This nicotine-based addiction,
Will claim your childre to kill.

Smoke and ash together,
will make a weapon way too strong,
for the human will to counter,
after years of doing wrong.

So while you're young and vibrant,
Crush this murderer where it sits,
Or it'll curse you where you stand,
And one day tear your lungs to bits.

The source of pain and sorrow,
Is now in your hands to tame.
I've posted my will against it,
and I would hope you do the same.
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AdriaFaye Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yeah and good piece.
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Thanks, it's most definitely not my favourite though..
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AdriaFaye Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I am a smoker. While I don't agree with the anti-smoking laws in some states, I do think it is right to ban smoking where children are.
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Felka-wolf Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
really, really good, like the concept :D

i think you could do without the "that" in the last stanza, though. it might not seem or look properly written when you take it out, maybe, but you know, that's just my opinion <:]
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:iconnumericvalueofaheart:
kk. I'll look it over. :) Haha, it's slowly improving.
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Felka-wolf Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:D yayyyyy!
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JadenRose Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010
I really like the idea of this and what it stands for. It's also really good as far as how it'swritten, although honestly i don't like how the third stanza fits together, as far as tenses and such, i think it could easily be improved. but i really like the piece overall, it's good :)
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yeah, I'm gonna re-write.
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JadenRose Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2010
mmkay. it's a really good poem, the theme and everything overall
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